Recently, my friend posted a villanelle on her blog, a poetic structure new to me. I decided it would be fun to piece one together too--plus, I have to write a poem for two of my classes (I'm using the same one). In short, a villanelle is nineteen lines long in an ABA rhyming pattern (except for the last stanza which is ABAA). Every line must be ten syllables long, and certain lines must repeat themselves throughout the poem. I wrote the poem while I was in the hospital. Dopey on meds. I'm worried the poem is overly flowery and forced in some areas. If you have any suggestions for improving it, let me know! Thanks.
(for art I am recreating Klee's Head of a Man painting in a cool color scheme to which I will attach the poem)
Paul Klee: Head of a ManUpon Thy Feathered Wing
Oh, let me ride upon thy feathered wing,
Soaring high, far away, above the clouds,To discover a song that I can sing.
My song, varied beautiful notes ringing,
Now stutters, the melody turned to shrouds.
Oh, let me ride upon they feathered wing.
Fly from the mist of past mem'ries trying.
Find new horizons away from the crowds,
To discover a song that I can sing.
My heart, torched, and broken, sadness singing,
Yearns for pleasant and lovely sounds.
Oh, let me ride upon thy feathered wing.
To courage cling, and though I be trembling,
Start reaching beyond these stony, cold rounds,
To discover a song that I can sing.
Find me a heart with joyful notes' greeting,
Singing forth love, dissolving mournful pounds.
Oh, let me ride upon thy feathered wing,
To discover a song that I can sing.
3 comments:
You're amazing! I'm really impressed by this - no less because you say you wrote it while under the influence of meds! Thanks for sharing! I think it's really good :)
I actually quite liked it. Last stanza did you mean sounds instead of pounds? remember poe and carroll wrote some of their best while under the influence!
Well, thank you.
Dad, I meant pounds but maybe I should change the word if it doesn't make sense. Thanks for the tip!!
hahaha... I'm not at all sure I'd like to write like Poe! :-/
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